What if I unscrew that mystery box
To find your heart tied within
Could I pluck it
Keep it
Next to mine
And hear its soft upbeat rhythm
What if I touch your song of love
As it slips
Through my train of consciousness
Could I cuddle it closer
On cold winter nights
And find some moments of coziness
What if we heard them in chorus sing
Those bluebirds
Rhyming all the strings
Would we flutter our blinks
Like butterfly wings
Dancing in trance to melodious rings
A secret crush, no more you can be
Possible things
Don’t end in a dream
Your heart whispers closer
I for one
In love, I float in ecstasy
(c) Pushpee
i loved it........especially the first 5 lines.....really touching....
ReplyDeletei have always believed that with the simplest of words you can touch a million of hearts and those first five lines were like that.......
i'm not complaining about the other half of the poem....but just telling how much i loved the first ones..... :)
nice one puspee....
ReplyDeleteVery nice Pushpa!
ReplyDeleteIt's very touching! :)
Well I am poetry challenged(Yeah I don't understand it) but had write a comment here u see...
ReplyDeletenice one Pushpee..I very rarely understand poems; but this was was simple and nice..good luck :)
ReplyDeleteGood one Push-p! :)
ReplyDeleteLoved the feel it brought to the reader...mE!!! :)
Pushpa I hate tears...Khanna saab would have waxed eloquence.
ReplyDeleteThe poem sets the mood ,and the choice of words accentuate the feeling. I think the tenderness of it all was very well etched.
Inscribed.
Very nice. You have really put effort in improvising from first draft.
ReplyDeleteWhat if ..this goes on to win! Hehe, Loved your Pushpoetry!! :D
ReplyDeleteGo Triber!
amazing work pushee...simple and beautiful
ReplyDeleteDelightful, Pushy :-)
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That was a lovely poem!
ReplyDeleteLoved the way you write!
//Would we flutter our blinks
ReplyDeleteLike butterfly wings
Dancing in trance to melodious rings// beautifullllll :)
Loved your style of writing :)
Lovely poem there :)
Nice piece of poetry there! :)
ReplyDeleteLoved the rhymes.. :)
ReplyDeleteAnd u have made love so tangible Pushpee..pluck, touch, cuddle...:)
@Hitesh,Tavish, Niveditha, Dmanji, Neha,Gurneet,wordsdreamz,evanescentthoughts Pal, Thank you so much for your kind words
ReplyDelete@Sree..glad to know it made u feel hehehee :)
@Gyan, I hate tears too Heehee :)
@Kartik..feedback helps :)
@Arif I wished too :)
@Anuradha, Pins n Ashes...thanks for liking the lines, I enjoyed writing too
After posting my poem, I went away for a holiday and have just returned to see ur kind words
Thank you all so much
sorry I was not able to visit your blog to read ur post but will surely do as soon as possible....Thank you all so much